01:1101:11, 23 February 2016diffhist+36
Helianthus
I noted the weasel-y phrase "one cannot deny" That whole sentence does not follow the one before it, and might need to be excised or expanded.
16:3616:36, 16 June 2014diffhist+2
The Shawshank Redemption
I added quotation marks to the phrase "bull queer" in the plot section, to make it clearer that this is the phraseology used in the film, not a broadly defined category or technical term for prison sexuality.
05:1305:13, 11 January 2011diffhist−8
m
Magic circle
made the language more neutral by indicating that these are beliefs; describing "energy" as something people "raise" is misleading unless it specifies that this is what they believe to be happening
05:0405:04, 11 January 2011diffhist+29
Magic circle
I added "which they believe will" and "will provide them" to make the language more neutral; this article is not about asserting the truth of these claims, but to describe a practice
01:1101:11, 23 February 2016diffhist+36
Helianthus
I noted the weasel-y phrase "one cannot deny" That whole sentence does not follow the one before it, and might need to be excised or expanded.
16:3616:36, 16 June 2014diffhist+2
The Shawshank Redemption
I added quotation marks to the phrase "bull queer" in the plot section, to make it clearer that this is the phraseology used in the film, not a broadly defined category or technical term for prison sexuality.
05:1305:13, 11 January 2011diffhist−8
m
Magic circle
made the language more neutral by indicating that these are beliefs; describing "energy" as something people "raise" is misleading unless it specifies that this is what they believe to be happening
05:0405:04, 11 January 2011diffhist+29
Magic circle
I added "which they believe will" and "will provide them" to make the language more neutral; this article is not about asserting the truth of these claims, but to describe a practice