14:1314:13, 5 December 2022diffhist+27
Pat Tillman Foundation
I added a background section to make the flow better and the article more organized. I start off with the lead section to introduce what the foundation is and then I move into the background section to talk about Pat and who he is.Tag: Visual edit
13:4613:46, 5 December 2022diffhist+34
Pat Tillman Foundation
I added this new section to talk about the Tillman scholars program and its mission. This will give the article more background on how the foundation impacts others and what they do on a day-to-day basisTag: Visual edit
13:4513:45, 5 December 2022diffhist+897
Pat Tillman Foundation
These concluding sentences of this section talk about the foundation's success and how it has impacted others. This is valuable information because it shows how the foundation is doing in present day and what its impact on others isTag: Visual edit
13:3213:32, 5 December 2022diffhist+740
Pat Tillman Foundation
I added these sentences in the lead section because it gives information on Pat's time during his service and why he decided to serve. This is valuable information for the audience to know.Tag: Visual edit
13:3013:30, 5 December 2022diffhist+1,032
Pat Tillman Foundation
I added these three sentences to the lead section because they introduce Pat and his time before he served in the Military. Including facts about his time in the NFL helps the audience understand what he gave up in order to serve the U.S.Tag: Visual edit
13:2713:27, 5 December 2022diffhist−866
Pat Tillman Foundation
The section I moved down about the annual pats run and the scholar's program will still be used later in the article. It works better in its new place because it flows better. I deleted this other section because it is not needed and more information about it will be added in new sections.Tag: Visual edit
13:2313:23, 5 December 2022diffhist−336
Pat Tillman Foundation
I deleted this block quote because it is unreasonable to have work from the foundation's tax filings in this article. Instead, I am going to add paraphrased work from another trusted source.Tag: Visual edit
13:2313:23, 5 December 2022diffhist−760
Pat Tillman Foundation
I deleted this block quote because it is unreasonable to have work from the foundation's tax filings in this article. Instead, I am going to add paraphrased work from another trusted source.Tag: Visual edit
14:1314:13, 5 December 2022diffhist+27
Pat Tillman Foundation
I added a background section to make the flow better and the article more organized. I start off with the lead section to introduce what the foundation is and then I move into the background section to talk about Pat and who he is.Tag: Visual edit
13:4613:46, 5 December 2022diffhist+34
Pat Tillman Foundation
I added this new section to talk about the Tillman scholars program and its mission. This will give the article more background on how the foundation impacts others and what they do on a day-to-day basisTag: Visual edit
13:4513:45, 5 December 2022diffhist+897
Pat Tillman Foundation
These concluding sentences of this section talk about the foundation's success and how it has impacted others. This is valuable information because it shows how the foundation is doing in present day and what its impact on others isTag: Visual edit
13:3213:32, 5 December 2022diffhist+740
Pat Tillman Foundation
I added these sentences in the lead section because it gives information on Pat's time during his service and why he decided to serve. This is valuable information for the audience to know.Tag: Visual edit
13:3013:30, 5 December 2022diffhist+1,032
Pat Tillman Foundation
I added these three sentences to the lead section because they introduce Pat and his time before he served in the Military. Including facts about his time in the NFL helps the audience understand what he gave up in order to serve the U.S.Tag: Visual edit
13:2713:27, 5 December 2022diffhist−866
Pat Tillman Foundation
The section I moved down about the annual pats run and the scholar's program will still be used later in the article. It works better in its new place because it flows better. I deleted this other section because it is not needed and more information about it will be added in new sections.Tag: Visual edit
13:2313:23, 5 December 2022diffhist−336
Pat Tillman Foundation
I deleted this block quote because it is unreasonable to have work from the foundation's tax filings in this article. Instead, I am going to add paraphrased work from another trusted source.Tag: Visual edit
13:2313:23, 5 December 2022diffhist−760
Pat Tillman Foundation
I deleted this block quote because it is unreasonable to have work from the foundation's tax filings in this article. Instead, I am going to add paraphrased work from another trusted source.Tag: Visual edit