22:4122:41, 12 September 2023diffhist−103
Jake Lacy
Removed unnecessary language, not appropriate for encyclopedia content. Separated sentence that had an unnecessary semicolon. Periods and commas are the workhorses of the English language and should be punctuation of first choice.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
18:4518:45, 22 August 2023diffhist−406
Derrick Henry
Since Wikipedia articles are to be a summary of the facts of the subject, quotations rarely achieve that limited goal. They should be either removed or paraphrased. In this case, paraphrasing was not necessary since the only thing the quote did was to prove what was already sufficiently stated in four simple words in the previous sentence. Also, we need to make efforts to not simply cut, paste and quote information from third parties, but to paraphrase there, also.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
18:3618:36, 22 August 2023diffhist−9
D. J. Moore
Removed unnecessary word. The word "previously" is almost never needed, if ever. When you make the verb past tense, that indicates "previously." Also removed a comma. A simple compound sentence does not need a comma.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
20:2920:29, 14 August 2023diffhist−68
Walter Pidgeon
Removed editorial content, specifically "...that his popularity reached its height." That is when Pidgeon's popularity was at its height? Says who? There is no source for such a statement, which makes it an editorial comment, which is never allowed.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
20:1120:11, 14 August 2023diffhist−56
Walter Pidgeon
Corrected content to conform to encyclopedia style. Tip to editors: never write "as well as." "And" is always the preferred use. Never used three words when one word is sufficient.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
20:0820:08, 14 August 2023diffhist−38
Walter Pidgeon
Removed unnecessary content. We do not have to mention that Pidgeon had two marriages, we simply need only to mention the two marriages and people can count. Also, he did not marry the "former Edna Muriel Pickles." She wasn't the "former" Ms. Pickles until after they married.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
20:0020:00, 14 August 2023diffhist−93
Walter Pidgeon
Removed unnecessary con tent, and corrected grammar. Added a location and corrected a style error. Walter Pidgeon probably died eight days after a lot of people. Simply because someone with whom he had starred died eight days prior to him by is not relevant information.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
21:1321:13, 6 August 2023diffhist+1
Dan Haggerty
Restructured the awards list, so it was in a form that made sense to the reader. Just as fair warning, I am researching some of the claims made in this awards list, and I'm having trouble substantiating some. Those that cannot be verified will have to be deleted. I am digging deeply to try to substantiate them, even emailing the founders and/or presidents of the organizations involved. I hope I will be able to verify then.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
20:3220:32, 6 August 2023diffhist+93
Dan Haggerty
Restructured some sentences for proper style and better readability. Removed a questionable source and added a respected source.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
17:4017:40, 6 August 2023diffhist−108
Johnny Unitas
The source did not indicate that this subject was the first superstar of the game and one guy putting him in his top 10 quarterbacks does not indicate that this subject is "consistently" considered one of the top 10 quarterbacks of all time. Please do not editorialize in Wikipedia.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
22:5522:55, 4 August 2023diffhist−138
Tania Harcourt-Cooze
Again, tightened sentences and removed unnecessary or unsourced information. A note to editors: at some point we do have to say the name of our subjects instead of continuously using their pronouns.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
22:5022:50, 4 August 2023diffhist−66
Tania Harcourt-Cooze
Tightened sentences, removed unnecessary words. How does being "directly related" to someone differ from simply being related to someone? "Directly" is a worthless word in that sentence.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
02:2702:27, 20 July 2023diffhist−359
Little Big Town
Corrected style errors and removed unnecessary quotation. Please note that quotations, while allowed in encyclopedia writing, are discouraged. Encyclopedia writing is a style unlike any other. We write only facts using the fewest, most direct words possible. Quotations rarely achieve that tight sentence structure. If the content of the quotation is necessary, paraphrase it.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
17:1117:11, 18 July 2023diffhist−33
Phil Lynott
Removed inclusion of the attendance of a particular person at the funeral for this subject. According to all I have read, there were many people at that funeral. The only time where it would be appropriate to acknowledge a person's attendance over others would be if that person was a head of state. Otherwise, it's just another person attending a funeral.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
16:4716:47, 18 July 2023diffhist−55
Thin Lizzy
Corrected grammar and style errors. A band, such as Thin Lizzy, is a single unit and is an "it" not a "they."Tags: RevertedVisual editMobile editMobile web edit
05:0705:07, 17 July 2023diffhist−970
Robert Osborne
Continuing to restructure sentences to reflect proper encyclopedia style. A note to editors: encyclopedia style is different from any other style of writing. We write only facts using the fewest, most direct words.Tags: references removedVisual editMobile editMobile web edit
04:1304:13, 17 July 2023diffhist−91
Robert Osborne
Tightened sentence structure to reflect proper encyclopedia style. Removed unnecessary words and paraphrased a sentence that was a quote from the source without having been put in quotations.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
22:4122:41, 12 September 2023diffhist−103
Jake Lacy
Removed unnecessary language, not appropriate for encyclopedia content. Separated sentence that had an unnecessary semicolon. Periods and commas are the workhorses of the English language and should be punctuation of first choice.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
18:4518:45, 22 August 2023diffhist−406
Derrick Henry
Since Wikipedia articles are to be a summary of the facts of the subject, quotations rarely achieve that limited goal. They should be either removed or paraphrased. In this case, paraphrasing was not necessary since the only thing the quote did was to prove what was already sufficiently stated in four simple words in the previous sentence. Also, we need to make efforts to not simply cut, paste and quote information from third parties, but to paraphrase there, also.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
18:3618:36, 22 August 2023diffhist−9
D. J. Moore
Removed unnecessary word. The word "previously" is almost never needed, if ever. When you make the verb past tense, that indicates "previously." Also removed a comma. A simple compound sentence does not need a comma.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
20:2920:29, 14 August 2023diffhist−68
Walter Pidgeon
Removed editorial content, specifically "...that his popularity reached its height." That is when Pidgeon's popularity was at its height? Says who? There is no source for such a statement, which makes it an editorial comment, which is never allowed.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
20:1120:11, 14 August 2023diffhist−56
Walter Pidgeon
Corrected content to conform to encyclopedia style. Tip to editors: never write "as well as." "And" is always the preferred use. Never used three words when one word is sufficient.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
20:0820:08, 14 August 2023diffhist−38
Walter Pidgeon
Removed unnecessary content. We do not have to mention that Pidgeon had two marriages, we simply need only to mention the two marriages and people can count. Also, he did not marry the "former Edna Muriel Pickles." She wasn't the "former" Ms. Pickles until after they married.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
20:0020:00, 14 August 2023diffhist−93
Walter Pidgeon
Removed unnecessary con tent, and corrected grammar. Added a location and corrected a style error. Walter Pidgeon probably died eight days after a lot of people. Simply because someone with whom he had starred died eight days prior to him by is not relevant information.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
21:1321:13, 6 August 2023diffhist+1
Dan Haggerty
Restructured the awards list, so it was in a form that made sense to the reader. Just as fair warning, I am researching some of the claims made in this awards list, and I'm having trouble substantiating some. Those that cannot be verified will have to be deleted. I am digging deeply to try to substantiate them, even emailing the founders and/or presidents of the organizations involved. I hope I will be able to verify then.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
20:3220:32, 6 August 2023diffhist+93
Dan Haggerty
Restructured some sentences for proper style and better readability. Removed a questionable source and added a respected source.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
17:4017:40, 6 August 2023diffhist−108
Johnny Unitas
The source did not indicate that this subject was the first superstar of the game and one guy putting him in his top 10 quarterbacks does not indicate that this subject is "consistently" considered one of the top 10 quarterbacks of all time. Please do not editorialize in Wikipedia.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
22:5522:55, 4 August 2023diffhist−138
Tania Harcourt-Cooze
Again, tightened sentences and removed unnecessary or unsourced information. A note to editors: at some point we do have to say the name of our subjects instead of continuously using their pronouns.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
22:5022:50, 4 August 2023diffhist−66
Tania Harcourt-Cooze
Tightened sentences, removed unnecessary words. How does being "directly related" to someone differ from simply being related to someone? "Directly" is a worthless word in that sentence.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
02:2702:27, 20 July 2023diffhist−359
Little Big Town
Corrected style errors and removed unnecessary quotation. Please note that quotations, while allowed in encyclopedia writing, are discouraged. Encyclopedia writing is a style unlike any other. We write only facts using the fewest, most direct words possible. Quotations rarely achieve that tight sentence structure. If the content of the quotation is necessary, paraphrase it.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
17:1117:11, 18 July 2023diffhist−33
Phil Lynott
Removed inclusion of the attendance of a particular person at the funeral for this subject. According to all I have read, there were many people at that funeral. The only time where it would be appropriate to acknowledge a person's attendance over others would be if that person was a head of state. Otherwise, it's just another person attending a funeral.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit
16:4716:47, 18 July 2023diffhist−55
Thin Lizzy
Corrected grammar and style errors. A band, such as Thin Lizzy, is a single unit and is an "it" not a "they."Tags: RevertedVisual editMobile editMobile web edit
05:0705:07, 17 July 2023diffhist−970
Robert Osborne
Continuing to restructure sentences to reflect proper encyclopedia style. A note to editors: encyclopedia style is different from any other style of writing. We write only facts using the fewest, most direct words.Tags: references removedVisual editMobile editMobile web edit
04:1304:13, 17 July 2023diffhist−91
Robert Osborne
Tightened sentence structure to reflect proper encyclopedia style. Removed unnecessary words and paraphrased a sentence that was a quote from the source without having been put in quotations.Tags: Visual editMobile editMobile web edit