05:0105:01, 19 April 2021diffhist−138
Burial
→Live burial: An avalanche is a natural disaster and can just go in the list. Fix
MOS:OVERLINK for
dead and
accident, presumably by now people know what death means.
WP:LQ for story title, and we can assume that the telephone works and that sensors have telemetry
04:4604:46, 19 April 2021diffhist−3
Burial
"humans... which bury" should be "who bury", but can avoid whether non-human animals can be "who" by writing "humans... to bury"
04:4304:43, 19 April 2021diffhist−13
Burial
"may include... and ohers":don't need "and others" as "include" implies it is not an exhaustive list. Don't need "may", the alternatives ''do'' include these (whether culturally acceptable or not)
04:3804:38, 19 April 2021diffhist−22
Burial
"dead person or non-human animal" -> "dead body". First, there is no point distinguishing between humans/people (using different words) and non-human animals only to then combine them. Second, later in the article is section "Burial of animals" so writing "non-human animal" is overly pedantic.
03:3103:31, 19 April 2021diffhist−28
Yellow pages
→History: "yellowpages,xx" is not an Internet address (IP address), it's a domain name. "independent from each other", don't need "from each other"
03:2303:23, 19 April 2021diffhist−2
Yellow pages
"Yellow pages" are directories (as in hatnote), not "is any telephone directory".You could have "A Yellow pages is", but not "Yellow pages is". It's not number agreement but that "Yellow pages" is using the whole to mean the part
18 April 2021
18:0518:05, 18 April 2021diffhist−363
Entertainment industry during World War II
first sentence, it didn't "help aid support the cause of war". Assume the cause of war was Hitler: are we really saying that the Allied entertainment industry was their to help Hitler? Condense lede to reduce wordiness.
11:4511:45, 18 April 2021diffhist+53
Station
→See also: add Service Station (disambiguation), was in infrastructure section. Actually infrastructure and trasnsport sectrions rather overlap
05:0105:01, 19 April 2021diffhist−138
Burial
→Live burial: An avalanche is a natural disaster and can just go in the list. Fix
MOS:OVERLINK for
dead and
accident, presumably by now people know what death means.
WP:LQ for story title, and we can assume that the telephone works and that sensors have telemetry
04:4604:46, 19 April 2021diffhist−3
Burial
"humans... which bury" should be "who bury", but can avoid whether non-human animals can be "who" by writing "humans... to bury"
04:4304:43, 19 April 2021diffhist−13
Burial
"may include... and ohers":don't need "and others" as "include" implies it is not an exhaustive list. Don't need "may", the alternatives ''do'' include these (whether culturally acceptable or not)
04:3804:38, 19 April 2021diffhist−22
Burial
"dead person or non-human animal" -> "dead body". First, there is no point distinguishing between humans/people (using different words) and non-human animals only to then combine them. Second, later in the article is section "Burial of animals" so writing "non-human animal" is overly pedantic.
03:3103:31, 19 April 2021diffhist−28
Yellow pages
→History: "yellowpages,xx" is not an Internet address (IP address), it's a domain name. "independent from each other", don't need "from each other"
03:2303:23, 19 April 2021diffhist−2
Yellow pages
"Yellow pages" are directories (as in hatnote), not "is any telephone directory".You could have "A Yellow pages is", but not "Yellow pages is". It's not number agreement but that "Yellow pages" is using the whole to mean the part
18 April 2021
18:0518:05, 18 April 2021diffhist−363
Entertainment industry during World War II
first sentence, it didn't "help aid support the cause of war". Assume the cause of war was Hitler: are we really saying that the Allied entertainment industry was their to help Hitler? Condense lede to reduce wordiness.
11:4511:45, 18 April 2021diffhist+53
Station
→See also: add Service Station (disambiguation), was in infrastructure section. Actually infrastructure and trasnsport sectrions rather overlap