09:2309:23, 7 June 2010diffhist−1,174
Janet Frame
→Biographical overview: Did a major overhaul - tightened sentences, re-wrote sentences in the active voice, re-wrote awkward passages in plain English, removed redundant and irrelevant informationTag: references removed
08:4608:46, 7 June 2010diffhist−183
Janet Frame
Tightened a sentence, removed some redundant facts that had already been stated, moved the sentence to a place where it appears more natural.
08:3408:34, 7 June 2010diffhist−25
Janet Frame
tried to fix some academic-style writing (passive sentences, redundant words, etc), but much more needs to be done.
15:0015:00, 5 June 2010diffhist−146
Giora Epstein
deleted the bit about him being the leading jet-to-jet ace because some Korean war Russian pilots scored more.
09:2309:23, 7 June 2010diffhist−1,174
Janet Frame
→Biographical overview: Did a major overhaul - tightened sentences, re-wrote sentences in the active voice, re-wrote awkward passages in plain English, removed redundant and irrelevant informationTag: references removed
08:4608:46, 7 June 2010diffhist−183
Janet Frame
Tightened a sentence, removed some redundant facts that had already been stated, moved the sentence to a place where it appears more natural.
08:3408:34, 7 June 2010diffhist−25
Janet Frame
tried to fix some academic-style writing (passive sentences, redundant words, etc), but much more needs to be done.
15:0015:00, 5 June 2010diffhist−146
Giora Epstein
deleted the bit about him being the leading jet-to-jet ace because some Korean war Russian pilots scored more.