04:5904:59, 31 July 2016diffhist−11
Bruce Billson
Since the first sentence says that he was in the Australian House of Representatives, saying that he's an Australian politician is redundant. Non-Australians can't get elected to the Australian Parliament
04:3304:33, 31 July 2016diffhist+1
Groundwater
Garden path sentence. It's not "the largest source of usable water storage in the United States and California"
02:5002:50, 31 July 2016diffhist−10
John Gregory Bourke
American nationality is the default for U.S. Army people; it can be skipped, although of course a foreign nationality would deserve mention
04:5904:59, 31 July 2016diffhist−11
Bruce Billson
Since the first sentence says that he was in the Australian House of Representatives, saying that he's an Australian politician is redundant. Non-Australians can't get elected to the Australian Parliament
04:3304:33, 31 July 2016diffhist+1
Groundwater
Garden path sentence. It's not "the largest source of usable water storage in the United States and California"
02:5002:50, 31 July 2016diffhist−10
John Gregory Bourke
American nationality is the default for U.S. Army people; it can be skipped, although of course a foreign nationality would deserve mention