22:0322:03, 21 January 2023diffhist−20
James T. Patterson (historian)
→Career: "academic writing of political history and toward an emphasis on societal issues such as race, class, and gender" : "academic writing of political ..." > delete "academic writing of" as it suggests that "academics" only wrote about political history, not "societal issues"Tag: Reverted
21:4821:48, 15 June 2021diffhist+6
San Pedro Parks Wilderness
"The park's average elevation" > "The Wilderness's average elevation" : changed "park" to "wilderness", meaning the administrative unit, to avoid confusion with "park" in the sense of "meadow", a characteristic feature of the Wilderness. Also capitalized "Wilderness" when it is short for "San Pedro Parks Wilderness"
29 May 2021
20:2620:26, 29 May 2021diffhist−62
Canadian Indian residential school system
→Conditions: "They suffered from malnourishment and harsh discipline that would not have been tolerated in any other school system." Removed clause beginning with "harsh ..." Inhuman conditions are well documented in school systems worldwide and no data is given to back up comparison. Rhetorical flourish that introduces explicit POV rather than letting facts speak for themselves.Tag: Reverted
21:2421:24, 5 June 2019diffhist+6
Mira Jacob
"Indian American" > "East-Indian American", assimilating usage in first paragraph to the apparently acceptable usage found in "Personal life". (BTW: the usage "Asian Indian" is a common usage and is no more "racist" than "East Indian" or "Indian American". A disagreement on usage understandable to wikipedia readers should not result in charges of "racism". Here in New Mexico "Indian American" is likely to be interpreted as yet another synonym of "Native American".
19:0619:06, 17 October 2018diffhist−11
Dorothea Fairbridge
"continued supporting South Africa to be closely integrated into the British Empire" > "continued to support SA's integration into the BE" : more usual syntax
22:0322:03, 21 January 2023diffhist−20
James T. Patterson (historian)
→Career: "academic writing of political history and toward an emphasis on societal issues such as race, class, and gender" : "academic writing of political ..." > delete "academic writing of" as it suggests that "academics" only wrote about political history, not "societal issues"Tag: Reverted
21:4821:48, 15 June 2021diffhist+6
San Pedro Parks Wilderness
"The park's average elevation" > "The Wilderness's average elevation" : changed "park" to "wilderness", meaning the administrative unit, to avoid confusion with "park" in the sense of "meadow", a characteristic feature of the Wilderness. Also capitalized "Wilderness" when it is short for "San Pedro Parks Wilderness"
29 May 2021
20:2620:26, 29 May 2021diffhist−62
Canadian Indian residential school system
→Conditions: "They suffered from malnourishment and harsh discipline that would not have been tolerated in any other school system." Removed clause beginning with "harsh ..." Inhuman conditions are well documented in school systems worldwide and no data is given to back up comparison. Rhetorical flourish that introduces explicit POV rather than letting facts speak for themselves.Tag: Reverted
21:2421:24, 5 June 2019diffhist+6
Mira Jacob
"Indian American" > "East-Indian American", assimilating usage in first paragraph to the apparently acceptable usage found in "Personal life". (BTW: the usage "Asian Indian" is a common usage and is no more "racist" than "East Indian" or "Indian American". A disagreement on usage understandable to wikipedia readers should not result in charges of "racism". Here in New Mexico "Indian American" is likely to be interpreted as yet another synonym of "Native American".
19:0619:06, 17 October 2018diffhist−11
Dorothea Fairbridge
"continued supporting South Africa to be closely integrated into the British Empire" > "continued to support SA's integration into the BE" : more usual syntax