Leave detailed comments, with constructive criticism and suggestions on how to improve here on the talk page. Rudibatzell ( talk) 21:15, 21 February 2024 (UTC)
Logic: The flow of the article makes sense, with the overall concept being addressed before delving into different legal actions taken in response.
Content: While the content is all really good, the legal aspects can be a bit difficult for the casual reader to follow. For example, the sentence "Furthermore, Sheehan's presentation identified that "if a police officer batters himself his ability to conduct an objective investigation of the problem in other cases, decreases", leading to under-enforcement of domestic violence laws, an underutilization of protective measures, and an increased "risk for use of excessive force"." is a bit complicated to understand with a first read. I appreciate all the content and evidence presented, but some of it just might want to be further explained for the benefit of the reader.
Citations: The citations are well placed within the article itself and each adds to the reader's understanding of the topic. Elizab57 ( talk) 16:11, 1 March 2024 (UTC)
Article looks good overall, really comprehensive work. I just made a couple of small grammatical changes. I think you are missing a citation at the end of your Domestic Violence Offender Gun Ban section, and I would take a second look at your quotations in the 1994 VAWA and Domestic Violence LAPD sections, I think something is off with them. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bjurgens14 ( talk • contribs) 18:03, 1 March 2024 (UTC)
Leave detailed comments, with constructive criticism and suggestions on how to improve here on the talk page. Rudibatzell ( talk) 21:15, 21 February 2024 (UTC)
Logic: The flow of the article makes sense, with the overall concept being addressed before delving into different legal actions taken in response.
Content: While the content is all really good, the legal aspects can be a bit difficult for the casual reader to follow. For example, the sentence "Furthermore, Sheehan's presentation identified that "if a police officer batters himself his ability to conduct an objective investigation of the problem in other cases, decreases", leading to under-enforcement of domestic violence laws, an underutilization of protective measures, and an increased "risk for use of excessive force"." is a bit complicated to understand with a first read. I appreciate all the content and evidence presented, but some of it just might want to be further explained for the benefit of the reader.
Citations: The citations are well placed within the article itself and each adds to the reader's understanding of the topic. Elizab57 ( talk) 16:11, 1 March 2024 (UTC)
Article looks good overall, really comprehensive work. I just made a couple of small grammatical changes. I think you are missing a citation at the end of your Domestic Violence Offender Gun Ban section, and I would take a second look at your quotations in the 1994 VAWA and Domestic Violence LAPD sections, I think something is off with them. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bjurgens14 ( talk • contribs) 18:03, 1 March 2024 (UTC)