Geri, I really liked your pictures and diagrams. They were very relevant and eye catching. Bravo on finding some winners. Are they cited properly though? I also thought you interpreted the scientific information very well. The technical terms were very clearly explained. This is an interesting article and I think it will be a great addition to wikipedia. I am not sure if you need all of those bolded abbreviations though, you might want to check with that.
Great job, Conor — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cheffer2 ( talk • contribs) 22:10, 8 April 2014 (UTC)
Geri, Great intro! I think you have a typo here "The teeth can also appear normal in color, but be extremely thing and fragile in their appearance." I like how you have linked the buzz words to other articles. Great job at trying to break down the jargon into layman's terms; like the pictures as well. Typo here "Endodontic procedures are routinely recommended due to treatdental pulp exposure or periodontal abscess. " Overall a great read and easy to understand.
Good luck, April Hannafel2 ( talk) 06:22, 8 April 2014 (UTC)
Hey girl!!
Ok it looks thorough, maybe you can have some subtitles under your main headers to separate the section. Because it seemed like a book kind of lol. Other than that good pictures and stuff, just make sure to look back at the rubric for the small details. Emccre2 ( talk) 01:54, 7 April 2014 (UTC)
Geri, this is a spectacular page and the time you put into it really shows! I especially like the pictures you have provided for every user. Also, abstract is nicely done, and really does a great job of summarizing everything. There could probably be some more information on recent research, but I do know this is a rough draft so not all of the information has been presented. Under diagnosis, I see that you stated that your disease can be mistaken for Amelogenesis imperfecta, which is important to state. There was a typo after that word, should it be "of the"? Other than that, great jb and good luck moving forward!
Hyogina23 ( talk) 04:02, 7 April 2014 (UTC) Harin Yogina
- Good use of links to other wikipedia pages
- Look at other wikipedia pages and use cite tool for proper references section
- Introduction is very clear and approachable
- Make sure to explain or avoid jargon in symptoms section
- This is looking really great. Obviously you haven't really done the recent research section yet, but most of what you have done looks fairly thorough and well organized.
Geri, I really liked your pictures and diagrams. They were very relevant and eye catching. Bravo on finding some winners. Are they cited properly though? I also thought you interpreted the scientific information very well. The technical terms were very clearly explained. This is an interesting article and I think it will be a great addition to wikipedia. I am not sure if you need all of those bolded abbreviations though, you might want to check with that.
Great job, Conor — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cheffer2 ( talk • contribs) 22:10, 8 April 2014 (UTC)
Geri, Great intro! I think you have a typo here "The teeth can also appear normal in color, but be extremely thing and fragile in their appearance." I like how you have linked the buzz words to other articles. Great job at trying to break down the jargon into layman's terms; like the pictures as well. Typo here "Endodontic procedures are routinely recommended due to treatdental pulp exposure or periodontal abscess. " Overall a great read and easy to understand.
Good luck, April Hannafel2 ( talk) 06:22, 8 April 2014 (UTC)
Hey girl!!
Ok it looks thorough, maybe you can have some subtitles under your main headers to separate the section. Because it seemed like a book kind of lol. Other than that good pictures and stuff, just make sure to look back at the rubric for the small details. Emccre2 ( talk) 01:54, 7 April 2014 (UTC)
Geri, this is a spectacular page and the time you put into it really shows! I especially like the pictures you have provided for every user. Also, abstract is nicely done, and really does a great job of summarizing everything. There could probably be some more information on recent research, but I do know this is a rough draft so not all of the information has been presented. Under diagnosis, I see that you stated that your disease can be mistaken for Amelogenesis imperfecta, which is important to state. There was a typo after that word, should it be "of the"? Other than that, great jb and good luck moving forward!
Hyogina23 ( talk) 04:02, 7 April 2014 (UTC) Harin Yogina
- Good use of links to other wikipedia pages
- Look at other wikipedia pages and use cite tool for proper references section
- Introduction is very clear and approachable
- Make sure to explain or avoid jargon in symptoms section
- This is looking really great. Obviously you haven't really done the recent research section yet, but most of what you have done looks fairly thorough and well organized.