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I did indeed delete a large swathe of content, clearing out a load of paragraphs that felt like coat-racking, recentism and point of view.
I don't have time to explain everything in detail right now, but here's an example of one such paragraph:
It reads like an article from The Guardian that was haphazardly cherry-picked for the most outrage-inducing sentences. It kicks off with an opinion stated as a fact. Despite complaining about cuts to the number of beds, it doesn't give a sense of scale as to how many were cut (neither did the rest of the article, apart from an unsourced "30%" figure elsewhere), and what this was in relation to rising/falling demand. About a quarter of the paragraph is taken up by quotes from activists. The College's 85% figure gets repeated twice. 745 people were treated outside their home area but again, no sense of scale. The listing of trusts that were near-full is obvious cherry-picking.
There were loads of paragraphs like this. Anywikiuser ( talk) 16:49, 21 January 2020 (UTC)
Some of that stuff might possibly find a home somewhere else, but on the whole I think you did the right thing. Apart from any other consideration most of it only related to England. Rathfelder ( talk) 20:23, 21 January 2020 (UTC)
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I did indeed delete a large swathe of content, clearing out a load of paragraphs that felt like coat-racking, recentism and point of view.
I don't have time to explain everything in detail right now, but here's an example of one such paragraph:
It reads like an article from The Guardian that was haphazardly cherry-picked for the most outrage-inducing sentences. It kicks off with an opinion stated as a fact. Despite complaining about cuts to the number of beds, it doesn't give a sense of scale as to how many were cut (neither did the rest of the article, apart from an unsourced "30%" figure elsewhere), and what this was in relation to rising/falling demand. About a quarter of the paragraph is taken up by quotes from activists. The College's 85% figure gets repeated twice. 745 people were treated outside their home area but again, no sense of scale. The listing of trusts that were near-full is obvious cherry-picking.
There were loads of paragraphs like this. Anywikiuser ( talk) 16:49, 21 January 2020 (UTC)
Some of that stuff might possibly find a home somewhere else, but on the whole I think you did the right thing. Apart from any other consideration most of it only related to England. Rathfelder ( talk) 20:23, 21 January 2020 (UTC)