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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:1934 Muroto typhoon/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Hurricanehink ( talk · contribs) 00:16, 15 March 2016 (UTC) reply


  • "This value was also the lowest land-based pressure reading in the world on record at the time; however, it was surpassed the following year." - since the average reader of this article is likely a hurricane geek, I think it's worth mentioning that the 1935 Labor Day hurricane surpassed this in Florida
  • "After clearing Japan, the now extratropical storm traveled west and weakened. " - I'm assuming you mean east?
  • "Regarded as the "second[-]greatest catastrophe of modern Japan" - I don't think you need the hyphen in brackets. It draws too much attention IMO, even if it's technically needed
  • " Total damage exceeded US$300 million." - probably worth specifying it's 1934 USD
  • "On September 13, 1934, a tropical cyclone developed over the western Federated States of Micronesia." - is it worth saying what the islands were called at that time? ( Caroline Islands). In fact, that term is timeless, compared to FSM which implies the country that has only been around since the 80's. I'm probably reading too much into this
  • I hate to ask, since you have such good research for Osaka, but do you have any impacts for Muroto?! I'm not even sure if it was a city at the time, but if you get impacts for Kochi Prefecture, that would be close enough, since that is where Muroto is located.
  • "The Japanese military was deployed to Osaka before nightfall on September 21 and water was being trucked in." - this could use a bit stronger of an introduction for the aftermath section
  • Maybe link "Baron"? IDK, no worries

All in all a great article for such an old, historic storm. The only bit that might be tricky is Muroto impact, but there's an easy solution ("including Kochi Prefecture, where Muroto is located"). ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk) 00:16, 15 March 2016 (UTC) reply

  • Managed to find some bits for Kōchi and Muroto buried in Japanese sources and added that. I think I've covered everything though. Thanks for the review! ~ Cyclonebiskit ( chat) 01:04, 15 March 2016 (UTC) reply
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:1934 Muroto typhoon/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Hurricanehink ( talk · contribs) 00:16, 15 March 2016 (UTC) reply


  • "This value was also the lowest land-based pressure reading in the world on record at the time; however, it was surpassed the following year." - since the average reader of this article is likely a hurricane geek, I think it's worth mentioning that the 1935 Labor Day hurricane surpassed this in Florida
  • "After clearing Japan, the now extratropical storm traveled west and weakened. " - I'm assuming you mean east?
  • "Regarded as the "second[-]greatest catastrophe of modern Japan" - I don't think you need the hyphen in brackets. It draws too much attention IMO, even if it's technically needed
  • " Total damage exceeded US$300 million." - probably worth specifying it's 1934 USD
  • "On September 13, 1934, a tropical cyclone developed over the western Federated States of Micronesia." - is it worth saying what the islands were called at that time? ( Caroline Islands). In fact, that term is timeless, compared to FSM which implies the country that has only been around since the 80's. I'm probably reading too much into this
  • I hate to ask, since you have such good research for Osaka, but do you have any impacts for Muroto?! I'm not even sure if it was a city at the time, but if you get impacts for Kochi Prefecture, that would be close enough, since that is where Muroto is located.
  • "The Japanese military was deployed to Osaka before nightfall on September 21 and water was being trucked in." - this could use a bit stronger of an introduction for the aftermath section
  • Maybe link "Baron"? IDK, no worries

All in all a great article for such an old, historic storm. The only bit that might be tricky is Muroto impact, but there's an easy solution ("including Kochi Prefecture, where Muroto is located"). ♫ Hurricanehink ( talk) 00:16, 15 March 2016 (UTC) reply

  • Managed to find some bits for Kōchi and Muroto buried in Japanese sources and added that. I think I've covered everything though. Thanks for the review! ~ Cyclonebiskit ( chat) 01:04, 15 March 2016 (UTC) reply

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